title: 4.5/5

Sounds nice and really 'L'. It's kinda long for me,

plus I wonder why you didn't capitalize 'with'.

foreword : 7/10

The forword spoiled the common plot,

it makes me doesn't feel like it's original at all.

Plus,there're some serious grammar problems in the foreword.

I'm curious why the girl would change that much to win him?

appearance: 8/10

Very beautiful poster and background,

still got some problems about fonts and colours.

It's okay for me now.

plot : 8.5/10

Common comedy-romance asian series plot. 

It's still nice even I find something like this for the thousand time.

writing style : 13/15

You improved from your last story. Even though something is still weird

but I like it better here.

Well the grammar isn't perfect and I can still find some mistakes.

It shows more feelings of people than your last story.

flowing : 16/20

Something is going too fast here; flashback,

reality,concert, audition whatever-

I find it's too fast .. 

realistic : 5/10

This is kinda need a lot to improve.

Idols don't have that much time to take care over a sister of other idol,

that's point one. The second point is no matter idols tries to hide their sibling,

sasaeng fans would find it. The girl was a nerd but incredibly good at dancing O_O

If you're going to be a trainee, you need a contract to sign,

I believe the girl is still underaged ,why didn't her parent or at least her brother sign on the paper.

Why did she easily accepted to be a trainee when she said she doesn't like fame.

And many more things that aren't logical.

enjoyment : 18/20

This is nice; I mean Infinite is cool 

and Yunho is kinda very funny ( and a bit of.. ehm.. dumb? ) here.

you're doing good! Please write more great stories!

total : 80 /100

     ( Shinigami ) -

Sorry for very late review ;A;

I'm really busy with school atm.

♥♥♥ I'm glad that you requested again

and I can see improvement! Please write more!

You're doing better ♥♥ Fighting!