Back To You

Description

He wasn't well, and she didn't understand why. He was supposed to be happy, they both were. After that day, but he's not. He was sick. But what can she do? They're no longer a part of each other's life.

Foreword

So apparently, it's against "writing rules" to write a whole bloody paragraph or more of an author's notes of why I wrote it, what was my journey and all that jazz. I highly disagree. The journey is what makes the story. It must be heard. Though it may sound completely insignificant and you're probably bored by reading this now and went ahead on with the story. Well, that's fine. An author must add in a story before a reader begins. But the reader does not have to read it. The Author's note is meant for just the author, just to clarify and push them forward to make the continue writing, acknowledge their mistakes and just say a few words of their own thoughts of their piece.

I just have to say that this thing I have here commonly called a "one-shot" is a choppy story that flashes back and forth from a memory to the present time and it is incredibly short and incredibly corny and incredibly similar to what one would see in a bloody Korean drama. And honestly, this has to be one of my most disappointing pieces I have ever written, but I posting it simply because I want see the critiques I would receive for this story and what improvements I can make to my writing. How deep I can go with a writing? How realistic can I be? How emotional can I get where I'm crying over my own writing? 

So my main points are:

-Please critique me as harshly as possible
-This is not my best work
-I did not edit it or have someone look over it like I usually do

Disclaimer; I do not own Onew or Taemin; characters are semi-mine as they are used over and over again in Korean dramas and other fanfics with incredibly annoying cliche plots. Please forgive me.

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southqoreans
#1
Chapter 1: Aw this is so touching omg:')
poweroftwo #2
nice story!!


FIGHTING!! keep writing!
MintyPetals
#3
Chapter 1: speechless...that was really amazing <3
EXTRATERESTRIAL #4
your story is good!