Chapter 3

MAMACITA: Secrets of San Mar Valley
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Leeteuk follows through with the plan to steal the crown. MinJi makes an offer to Lee Donghae, the bounty hunter she's been looking for.

MAMACITA

The Offer:

Siwon just sat by the jail feeling sorry for himself, since he couldn't think of anything else to do at the moment. The word got around town within the hour. Sheriff Siwon left his post and a thief was able to get out of jail. Missy called him names as she passed by, following whispers from the saloon girls, Veronica and Jennifer. It couldn't possibly get any worse. He decided to drink his problems away at the bar since he had nothing better to do anyway. It wasn't like he had a most wanted criminal in jail to watch over, right?

"Hey, Sheriff!" Heechul happily shook his friend's hand. He couldn't help it, he was in a great mood. "What can I do for you?"

"Just give me the strongest bottle you have." Siwon sat at the bar with Heechul next to him.

"You sure? What's bothering you?" Heechul knew exactly what was bothering him but decided not to say it. He then told Leenah to give them their strongest whiskey.

"Please? I'm humiliated, a laughing stock, and I just want to forget how much of a failure I am before I leave town for good."

"Wow, you're not even drunk yet and you're already saying nonsense." Heechul got the shot glasses and poured drinks for the both of them. "You're not gonna leave town, and you're not a failure. Now kick back and relax because I'm drinking with you."

"You're the only person I've seen today who hasn't laughed at or whispered about me." Siwon took the shot glass. "You're such a good friend."

"Cheers, my friend." Heechul clinked his shot glass with Siwon and they drank.

Heechul knew he couldn't drink too much. He had to stay on high alert for what was about to come next.

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Everything was normal for that afternoon. The sun was still shining, Eunhyuk was once again busy showing off for Missy, Shindong was working (waiting for Sungmin), and Kyuhyun was playing a "fair" game of poker with Ryeowook outside the saloon.

"So Ryeowook," Kyuhyun spoke up. "It's been a whole day. A whole day of you thinking. Are you going to accept my offer?"

Ryeowook became stiff at his words. He had thought constantly about it. He still didn't have an answer for him. "I don't know. I'm just not sure if I'm capable of doing it. I mean, do I really seem like the type to be involved?"

"That's exactly what makes you perfect. You blend in, which is the whole point." Kyuhyun replied, then immediately lowered his voice. "As a matter of fact, I actually have a job for you right now."

"What is it?" Ryeowook lowered his voice as well.

"Leeteuk, the prisoner, he's been hiding out at my place all morning."

"What!" Ryeowook raised his voice, but Kyuhyun quickly shushed him. "Why?"

"Leeteuk is out because he has his own job to do. That's where you come in. He's going to rob Sungmin in a short while, and I need you to not interfere. After it's over, I'll tell you what to do from there." Kyuhyun ordered him. "Understood?"

Ryeowook fidgeted in his seat. "Yeah."

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"So, how do you tell that one apart from all the others?" MinJi pointed to the watermelon the fruit shop owner, Kangin, was holding.

"Oh, well one time while I was carrying her, I bumped into a wall while I was drunk. Marcy has a small mark on her now. I feel terrible every day because of it. Right there, see?" Kangin pointed to the scratch mark on the watermelon.

"Marcy?" MinJi couldn't believe he actually named it, but it was still funny.

"Yes! I would marry Marcy if I could."

"Good for you."

"Seriously," He said sternly, "I would seriously marry her if I could. I love her."

"And again I will say, good for you."

"Here, why don't you have this? On the house." Kangin handed her an apple. "It's fresh."

"Thank you so much." MinJi took the apple.

"It's no problem. Please don't hesitate to come back." Kangin smiled sweetly as he waved to her.

"Finally!" Sungmin cheered to himself, "I finally found that key!" 

He pranced outside to the deposit carriage that contained the empty chest and used the key to unlock it. He rushed back inside his office to gently grab the crown off his desk and bring it to the now open chest. He carefully placed it inside and locked it with the key, then placed said key into his jacket pocket.

Shindong stopped working and glanced over at Kyuhyun, giving him a nod. Leeteuk peeked out from his hiding place, which was behind Ryeowook's barber shop. He gave Shindong a nod, waiting for his signal. Shindong casually approached Sungmin with his hammer at the ready.

"Hey, Sungmin." Shindong patted his back. "Have you taken a look at the wheels on this thing lately? They really need fixing, and I know you don't want any valuables in there to get damaged."

"Really? You think so?" Sungmin looked puzzled. "What's wrong with them?"

"Look closely here. Do you see that?" Shindong made him look closely at the wheel, averting his attention.

"I don't see anything," Sungmin admitted while Shindong anxiously gestured for Leeteuk to come and take the chest. Sungmin then surprisingly laughed, confusing Shindong. Sungmin stood and looked at him with a smirk on his face.

"Do you think I don't know what you're doing?" Sungmin chuckled.

He caught Shindong off guard when he quickly reached into his jacket and pulled out a gun, but since Leeteuk was just grabbing the chest, Shin

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cicmel13 #1
Chapter 2: Chapter 1: Almost sobbing this first chapter is so sad! I feel so bad for MinJi she had to watch her father die, but still stayed silent per his request. And to top it off she doesn’t have her mother’s ring anymore?
Charlot1081 779 streak #2
Chapter 23: As the last chapter, I want to go over all of the characters.
First of, Minji. Minji had her father stolen from her and she was destined to find the man who killed him. She went to the town to find the bounty hunter, who had a big story of his own. Her perception of each character changed as the story went on. The way I see it, is that Minji has a very malleable opinion. Where she will change her mind given a circumstance. That being said, she could be easily tricked, as she was fooled by Heechul's calm demeanor at the beginning and weary of Kyuhyun's suspicious behavior.
Kyuhyun is where he is today because he's a natural protector. He wanted to protect his mother and Henry and even Zhoumi. He stood up against the tyrants who wanted to steal money from Zhoumi, accidentally killing one of them. The Chinese mafia decided to take revenge by taking out the people he cared for to "teach" Kyuhyun a lesson. This made Kyuhyun stone cold and sometimes he relives his past. Whenever he gets put in a familiar situation, it's like something in him snaps and he forgets that this is reality. It could be seen again with Sungah and Jack; Ryeowook and Sungah; and Sungah with Eunhyuk's bull fighting. He's a protector and won't stop at anything to kill someone to protect.
Donghae is an interesting one. He's been through literal hell by the people who were supposed to take care of him. The Church is a place you should be getting guidance and discipline, not torture. I hate it when people call orphans rejects. Donghae and Yesung thrived off each other's energy. And while Yesung's adulthood was short, he explored everything he ever wanted to: alcohol, , and being a hunter. Donghae still has emotional and physical scars, but he's able to contain himself relatively well.
Ryeowook had the most character development, in my opinion (not just because he's my bias). He went from being a scared giraffe to a courageous stallion. I know he wasn't able to keep Sungah safe in the end, but he genuinely cared about her. He had his eyes on her since the day they met, he bit his tongue, and got walked all over just so he could make Sungah happy. I'm glad that they could share "I love you" and die in each other's arms.
Leeteuk and Shindong were a mess! XD They're funny but stupid. I could never tell if Leeteuk was drunk or sober, because he acted the same in either state! It's giving old Western movies with the henchmen who can't do anything right. I'm here for it <3 Heechul thought he was slick, but involving those two in his plot was the biggest mistake.
Sungmin and the mafia were interesting. Like the mafia "cared" about family, yet Sungjin was literally disowned and killed. What logic? I'm glad Sungmin got out of there. I hope that the people at the capital don't search for him though. Seeing one of his men killed on that train is a clear sign something in San Mar is going down.
Giving a big shout out to the ladies and Kangin for making it out alive (aside from Sungah). Hopefully Kangin and Missy can be right for each other. ^^

Over all, it was a wonderful story! I'm so glad I had the opportunity to read it. <3 Good luck with the sequel (and I voted Wookie in your poll, if that was even a surprise).
Charlot1081 779 streak #3
Chapter 22: So much happened in this chapter, oh my goodness. Where do I begin? Heechul, you know damn well nothing has ever changed. The moment you killed Yesung was the moment you didn't value life anymore. It wasn't just stealing anymore, it was murder. You didn't care how many people you had to kill to get what you wanted. I'm sure he would even kill Leenah if it meant he could fulfill his desires. Leenah loves the toxic relationship - she only agrees to Heechul's crimes because she loves him. Nope.. She's mentally ill at that point. Especially if at the end, she didn't see anything wrong. Now let's talk about the end of this chapter....

YOU KNOW I LOVE WOOKIE!! How could yoU!! My poor baby Wookie and Sungah! How- why- Sadness.. I can understand why Wook would shoot himself, the one thing that brought him happiness; the person he had to wait so long to have.. Kyuhyun had to watch Wook and Sungah die, just like he saw Henry and his mother die. Tears of pain.. Donghae, I don't blame you for wanting to kill Heechul, but yes, I think it's best if you go take a stroll to calm your nerves. After everything that happened, he doesn't want to invite Soonyee with him just for the possibility of her getting killed too. Yesung lived his best life out of the orphanage, I don't think he had any regrets lol Maybe not getting one more shot of liquor in. XD I love how Shindong and Leeteuk just wake up AFTER all of the drama. They're like, Huhhhhh? XD Like yeah, you guys missed it lol
Charlot1081 779 streak #4
Chapter 21: Aigoo~ The teamwork in this chapter! I like how Eunhyuk and Minji actually got along and didn't cause any trouble. I mean, I was a little scared when Eunhyuk was going to be on their team, but he proved himself to be useful! I actually liked Leeteuk's method. He kinda did help.. Just a bit. It made everyone confused, it created an opening to start fighting hahah But it's such a Leeteuk thing to just say, "peace~" And jump out of the train lol Sungmin redeemed himself though. He shot one of his men, the dude who tortured Kyuhyun in the beginning. I think that was perfect. Kyuhyun has been through a lot, but after being protected by the person he thought betrayed him, I think it's safe to say he won't hold a grudge on the moment anymore. The last thing to do is get Leeteuk, Heechul, and Shindong arrested: then everyone can have their closure.
I can't wait to see what Kangin, Sungah, and Ryeowook have been up to while the others almost died~ ^^
Charlot1081 779 streak #5
Chapter 20: Immediately, I was so relieved. Like yes, Sungmin was sent to actually kill Kyuhyun. But he decided he didn't want the heir and he didn't want to kill Kyuhyun. He wanted to live on as if nothing ever happened. The unfortunate part is that he did kinda betray Kyuhyun. While he didn't kill Kyuhyun's family, it was Sungmin who informed the family about Kyuhyun. I'm glad that Kyuhyun had both the support of Sungah and Minji. But the revelation! It was Leeteuk and Heechul who killed Minji's father! I honestly didn't see that coming. Now hearing how Leeteuk was a masked man on the train and killed Yesung, I was starting to get suspicious. But this- nope, didn't see it. Does Heechul remember Minji? Or was it something he forgot as he turned into a "changed man?" I know he didn't see Minji, but I wonder if he made the connection. I'm super happy for Eunhyuk and Victoria's relationship! It's getting better, but it's still a bit bumpy.
Now the end, where Missy is being all flirty. Like girl, come now, you know he's taken. But I won't blame Kyuhyun if he did something to her to get the information. I mean, hormones are real. And Missy probably hasn't gotten any for a day or two lol Bring it on!!
I just wanna say, Heechul and Leeteuk are giving sibling energy. One always has to be the "responsible" one while the other one does whatever they want. Perhaps if Leeteuk didn't follow Heechul, they wouldn't be in trouble. But I still feel like Heechul would have tried getting the crown. He lost it when Siwon got shot. Lucky for me, I watched the MV *snaps fingers a few times* he didn't die~~ Heheh
Charlot1081 779 streak #6
Chapter 19: Okay, but seriously, Eunhyuk is giving spicy Latina vibes. I work with a lot of Hispanic ladies, and it brings me back to their Spanglish. XD I also see that Wookie and Sungah are having their little bit of romantic time over there. They can't keep their hands off each other too~ 😏You know Heechul is out of options when he starts blackmailing. He knew he would get under Kyuhyun's skin by exposing Sungmin like that. When he said Sungmin was the mafia leader's son, I literally stood up and walked away from my laptop for almost a whole minute - staring out of the window as everything I knew had been a lie. I know how Kyuhyun felt after Heechul exposed Sungmin. Remembering about his mom and Henry's death, I can understand why he turned to rage. Even if Sungmin changed, he shouldn't have kept that from Kyuhyun. Unfortunately, I don't think there would have been any good way for Sungmin to tell Kyuhyun though. There would be no trust between them, because Kyuhyun is always there to avenge his family. I see his and Sungah's relationship more as a mother-son relationship. Because from the moment he saw Sungah in trouble with Jack, he saw it as an opportunity to correct himself - to protect the lady in danger. He couldn't protect his mother, but he could protect Sungah. It's going to take a minute or two for Kyuhyun to recover from today, but I hope he'll come to terms soon. For the sake of the town.
Charlot1081 779 streak #7
Chapter 18: Shindong and Leeteuk are the hilariously doomed duo. You have one who can't shoot and then you have another one who has no control. But they're both kinda dumb. What do you expect though? (Especially with Leeteuk) I wasn't impressed with Heechul's manipulation. Leenah, you can find a better person to be your kiddo's father figure. Heechul's gonna go to jail, and you know it. *smh* Leeteuk had one job and he failed horribly. Heechul, you promised Leenah a good life, and now you're letting her friends get hurt without a care in the world. And that's what greed does to you. He wants Sungmin's crown so he can sell it and get money. If he kept working hard with honesty, he can provide a happy life for Leenah and his kid. But he wants more. And that has been Heechul's mistake.
Charlot1081 779 streak #8
Chapter 16: From the beginning of the chapter and evil till the end of the chapter, I kept saying: "Yesung is too loose, he's too much of a party boy. He's gonna die because he's reckless." Uhhhh Yeah. Yesung, I love yah honey, but.. Dude. You were supposed to listen to Donghae and go about things better. But Yesung took the Donghae approach, which is to just start hitting. While that's slightly worked for Donghae, you should have kinda stepped back, Yesung. It is sad that Yesung's dad is the mafia leader. I know Donghae's next mission is to kill him. As for the masked men... LEETEUK!! How dare you be a part of Donghae's past. I don't know how Donghae hasn't just shot Leeteuk yet (current time). Cuz like.. I would have.
And on a less serious note.. Donghae and Yesung had been sleeping around a lot on their journeys (well especially Yesung, since he's a player). I wonder if they have any children they don't know about. XD
Charlot1081 779 streak #9
Chapter 15: Poor baby Donghae.. It's heartbreaking to know that Donghae had to see both of his parents die, and his sister. Seeing his father shoot himself was even more devastating. I wish that his father gave him to a friend or brought him to another town. He didn't deserve the mistreatment. Thankfully, I've never had to go to a Catholic school, but I have a friend that did. She didn't get beat up, but she was definitely mistreated. I can just imagine, Yesung in the dark corner, shaking every time the door to the cellars opens. Always living in the shadow because he knows that he's just a mistake. While sister Kim loves him, she can't show it in front of Park. I know that the boys got out safely, but I have a suspicion that either Kim was put in the cellar the next morning, or beaten to death by Park. She's not going to be set free unless it's through death, which might be better than being trapped in the orphanage.
I feel like there's more to Donghae's past though, that can't be it. I have a feeling that Yesung is going to be murdered, and I dunno if I'm ready for it. We'll have to see~
Charlot1081 779 streak #10
Chapter 14: YAS Wook's side of the story!! I feel so bad for Wookie, he always had love for Sungah. During the western era, classrooms weren't too big yet. In early America days, before Americans declared independence from the Crown, many children were homeschooled. Teachers with a what we now know as a high school diploma came to each house of lords to teach the children. Classrooms were introduced in the late 1800s and early 1900s. Arranged marriages are still a thing, especially in Asian culture, so with Sungah being married off to wealth is very realistic. The unfortunate part is that most wealthy men in this time period were snobs and didn't care much for their women. I'm glad that Wook wanted to kill Jack himself, and got to shoot the fatal bullet. That was definitely the closure he needed.
Let's agree with Hannah: take the fake mustache off, Siwon. You're having a mid-life crisis lol Kyuhyun is already killing people and it was his first day out of Siwon's house! Dude! Chill! I like how one of the only rules was to NOT have a weapon and the first thing he did was swipe Siwon's gun XD Kudos for Kyuhyun killing that guy though. He was literally scum.
So Sungmin started it!! He wanted a little mafia of his own hahah Maybe he did something illegal in the capital, hm?
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