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xingehet #1 Jun 16, 2013 12:01:57

Chapter 10: NOOOOO WHY SO SHORT.WHY. PLEASE MAKE IT LONGER OR HAVE A SEQUEL ;A;

xingehet #2 Jun 14, 2013 09:57:50

Chapter 8: Yaaay! Update :3

SammiCass #3 Jun 10, 2013 12:59:51

Chapter 5: bum bum bummmm!!! Cliffhanger!

PetShawal #4 Jun 9, 2013 19:25:54

Chapter 3: I think you should elaborate moments more and use more adjectives. It seems a little rushed to me... And if possible you should use paragraphs to structure your chapters more.

ms11ww #5 Jun 9, 2013 00:44:06

Chapter 4: is that the end please say no

xingehet #6 Jun 8, 2013 23:42:09

Chapter 4: First comment! I love your story! Nurr ;A; DONÈT DIE TAO .+. TAORIS FIGHTING :DDD